Wednesday, 18 May 2016

Drown Because Of Clumsy



Drown Because Of Clumsy
Mirza Shamina Mohd Yazid

          Last week, my family and I had spent time at a beach resort. We all were having fun together. My both parent were chilled together and my little brother was playing a football while I just relaxing by the pool at the beach resort.
          There were many people at the beach enjoy themselves to fill their leisure time on the weekend. While I was chilling with my smoothie, I heard a scream. I was shocked and my smoothie's glass felt down and broke. I am rushing to the pool. When I came,  I saw a boy drown screaming.
          I called a lifeguard to ask him to help the boy but I have being ignored. I am blanked and I do not know what to do. I was very panic at that time so I jump into the pool.
          Suddenly, I just remembered that I cannot swam. Both of us were drowned. I screamed for a help, My mother came with a worried face. She called my father and my father came and helped us. Thank you to my father for helped us.
          There is two ways to prevent an accident at the swimming pool. Firstly, you have to wear a swimming stuff for safety. You also must follow the given rules. In addition, you must swim at the right pool. If you are 6-12  years old you can swim at the children pool. If you are 13 and above you can swim at the adult pool.
           After this incident, we must beware when beside the pool.

6 comments:

  1. A better idea but still with grammatical errors. For example, "I am rushing to the..." which suppose to be in past tense " I rushed to the..". One more example, "There is two ways.." which suppose to be "There are two ways..". Please read and check the grammar before you post.

    I suggest the grammar check feature embedded in your blog dashboard to check the grammar before posting. You will learn a lot. Thank you! *wink*

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    1. Thankyou for correcting my grammar sir!! :)

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    2. You are welcome. There are still errors. "... but I have being ignored." is suppose to be written "... but I was ignored.". "... blanked and I do not know what..." is suppose to be "...blanked and I did not know what...".

      There are few more. Please re-check and edit. Thanks! *wink*

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  2. Keep on writing i am confident the next one will be even better... 👍

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